I try to write
Inside my head.
I play with words all day.
I paint with them.
I sing to them.
But I cannot make them stay.
I tried to write
Of castles built
With matches, cards and strings.
Of hours spent
In slow regret,
And blowing perfect rings.
I’ve tried to write
Of why I sought
A downward curving smile.
And how we interred
A girl who dared
To love with tasteless guile.
Doing the math
Of collision paths,
And vows that sound sublime.
And motherhood
Tied hand and foot,
Sneering, biding time.
Of all of me,
Together to be
A small domestic army.
Of words that scald
My faulty world,
And blows that merely scar me.
Of Almond Eyes,
And all the lies
I’ve told to get this far.
Falling in love
With a man I thought
I’d been loving from the start.
I’m trying to make
These words behave
The way I’m perambulating.
Words are all
I’ve ever screwed
(But that’s me, deviating)
Almond Eyes
I want to write.
That’s all I’m trying to say.
I want to write
For you, my love,
But you take my words away.
Amritorupa Kanjilal alo writes at Rivers I Have Known: Books, Reviews, and More. Please visit her there!
And vows that sound sublime.
And motherhood
Tied hand and foot,
Sneering, biding time.
Of all of me,
Together to be
A small domestic army.
Of words that scald
My faulty world,
And blows that merely scar me.
Of Almond Eyes,
And all the lies
I’ve told to get this far.
Falling in love
With a man I thought
I’d been loving from the start.
I’m trying to make
These words behave
The way I’m perambulating.
Words are all
I’ve ever screwed
(But that’s me, deviating)
Almond Eyes
I want to write.
That’s all I’m trying to say.
I want to write
For you, my love,
But you take my words away.
Amritorupa Kanjilal alo writes at Rivers I Have Known: Books, Reviews, and More. Please visit her there!
24 paper boats came floating back to me:
ebhabeo phire asha jae :)) ...wonderful poem....
What a compliment in the final stanza.
Somehow, the last stanza (referring to Jason's comment) doesn't seem like a comment to me... more of an aptly disguised subtle accusation really. But then, poetry is open to any number of interpretations.
The paradox of writing about not being able to write and producing sheer brilliance... :)
Love these lines
Doing the math
Of collision paths,
And vows that sound sublime.
And motherhood
Tied hand and foot,
Sneering, biding time.
Classic LGL! Glad you kept your promise. :)
its sometimes a good thing...if someone takes ur words away...clearly thats given u something,s omething else to write about?
lovely poem :)
And I have no words to describe the post! Lovely!
How you been?
So beautiful!
I tried to write,
How much I liked
This lovely poem by you
But as always
My senses reel
And you take my breath away!!!
I tried to write,
How much I liked
This lovely poem by you
But as always
My senses reel
And you take my breath away!!!
Reminds me of the song.. piya bina from Abhiman.. specifically...
'Piya jab se roothe.. ke hoton se merey.. sangeet rootha..'
i like
It's so nice to know you're still writing, and writing about writing is best of all! This has very interesting images -- castles built/With matches, card, and strings; blowing perfect rings; a downward curving smile; the math of collision paths; motherhood tied hand and foot, sneering; blows that scar; and, of course, Almond Eyes. Beautiful and interesting journey toward the loss of words.
I've been slacking due to lack of competition. I've never managed to rhyme matching the syllables for rhythm. You've done for the larger part in the poem.
I see I have to up my game now. :P
wow L-G-L! ur poems are always so intense..i guess it personifies the poet completely...please write more often :))
You have an amazing art of writing! Outstanding!!
Bhavesh
i don't know where you've been, lgl, but you just took me on a trip to sublimity.
this is truly wonderful. musical and moving and wry and honest - i will be reading this many times more.
fantabulous!!! felt as if u wer here reading out the words u wrote! its been long tht i read a blog :( m happy tht i came back and read this one :)
I can't believe I haven't been here bef... I mean... joined the dance yet. Such a beautiful poem. I liked the rhyme scheme and I liked how you've used your words to mean more than one thing. Things like that make this a very powerful, emotional read. I'll be back. Thanks for writing! :)
As lovely as always! Nice to read ur work...like before:)
ps:Congrats!!! And hope u both are having a good time. Can u mail me ur mail id??? Atleast next time when u go missing, I can check on u:))) Really, misd u my friend!
good,intense,tight but cliche.overused words and images crowd together....we want sum freshness from ur pen,dear
Oh Almond eyes
ride these words
and fly high
you are not binded to the sky ... keep walking!!!
Extremly nice poem ... Could not stop myself from commenting inspite of not knowing you... Nice post ....
Very Nice and Sweet
Hey You!! So. It's been a long long time. I am not even sure if you remember me anymore. I shut my blog down almost a year back. And this sounds weird but I tried contacting you. Don't have your mail ID though.. I needed to talk to you about Calcutta! zeba.24.01.07@gmail.com
lovely
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