It's not yet too late
To wash my skin clean of you.
The water beckons.
Amritorupa Kanjilal also writes at Rivers I Have Known: Books, Reviews, and More. Please visit her there!
The Broken Shovel
4 years ago
Friday, May 8, 2009
On A Wooden Bridge
It's not yet too late
To wash my skin clean of you.
The water beckons.
Amritorupa Kanjilal also writes at Rivers I Have Known: Books, Reviews, and More. Please visit her there!
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57 paper boats came floating back to me:
Who who?
Firstly...
breathtakingly beautiful, serene and gentle painting...
and i can say the same for ur wee little 5-7-5 haiku!
sigh...wish i cud write like u
or at the very least...jump into those beckoning waters and cause lovely swirls...
lovely lovely LGL!!! simply beautiful....
haven't had enough
your poems quench and I yet
am left wanting more!
wait wait....
haven't had enough
your poems quench and I yet
am left thirsting more!
there, that's more like it!
LGL....ur blog is so inspiring...am improving simply on comments!!!! :D :P
hey, for a post this short, it's terse and bang-on. liked it. :)
Yet another Haiku... and what a subtle one!!!
I want to kill myself everytime i see one!!
(my inability to write a haiku is getting the better of me...)
I was reminded of the time I spent in Goa... the water actually was rejuvenating.. I came back a different person.. and i know people who'd actually vouch for that.
Surprising what it can do to you, eh?
But I was again losing my path when I read this.
You haiku came just at the right time.. it proved my danger alarm.
Can't tell you thankful i am for this one!!
:-)
Beautiful sanp.
Nice snap.
beautiful.. :)
This is classic. I say this because I felt similar feelings two years back. Its almost like purgation.
Simply put yet profound.
i have a pimple too... : need some wash...
chrizwonderful painting..
Beautiful. It's never too late but sometimes we don't see the water beckoning.
Wow...just when I am still revelling in your previous poem about the monsoons..you go ahead and spring yet a beautiful one on me...
I absolutely love this one..
Ouch, so sad :(
That was obscure... to say the least. Leaves a lot to the reader's imagination... and a thousand things come running into my head right now!
Great way of writing. First Haiku I've read which has this particular element in it.
Needless to say, I'm impressed... again! :D
Cheers...
You should also start doing Haiku Wednesdays... now that you've become a pro at it. :-D
Look how well you've learned
The 5-7-5 haiku
You rock, you poet.
nahaane ka plan hai? ;-)...hehe
Simply wonderful
girl,your haiku makes me lull
From whence comes your spell!!!
Thanks for your so very wonderful & inspiring comment. You made my day...err night, mid-nite here!And love you too:)
Nice Deepa!
This is seamless and open and intriguing at the end. That, of course, adds to its effectiveness. For a while, I didn't even realize it was haiku. Now, THAT's well done!
ooohhh...deep :)
who who who?? :P
good one grl!
just a part of life eh???
brilliantly put :)
It is never too late, is it?
Take the plunge!
Peace.
HEy LGL
thanks for the suggestions you gave...
i will try to work on them....
Actually its a dedication to someone and that person has liked it very much..so i continued..:P
from next time i wont make you impatience...
Hoping for a story from you..:)
Hmm a Haiku.. and how beautiful!
Keep 'em coming! :)
nice Haiku..with a snap to compliment :))
You make it sound so easy :-) Sometime it may take a life :-)
That is some serious washing!
I am a fan of haiku.
Good one!
I have a say with The Girl from Cherry Blossom Street, I love the painting and I can feel the joy of yours putting us to admiration:)
Great blog, great pictures and poems:)
Happy Mother's Day!
theres an uncanny trance in those few lines...wonderful....
Crisp..leaves a lot to the reader's imagination ofcouse.
If ever we have loved somebody..can we, with all our efforts, wash clean our skin of that beloved.
keep writing...belated "Shubho Pochishe Boisaakh"..do peep into my blog.... And yes..tht picture was nice as well :)
Beautiful...
There is so much left to the reader's disposal as to how he/she will interpret it...
How do you say so much with less words?
A lovely picture... & really pearly slick words falling into depths of velvety mind...
Hi girl how u doing... LOng time..
Is that a Haiku..
Pretty good job..
one tight crunchy post!
Nothing is as quaint
As a wooden bridge on a
Gentle green river.
i can't tell if this is hope or regret - or a little of both - and i love that about it.
i can't tell if this is hope or regret - or a little of both - and i love that about it.
Brill haiku :)
pari- thank you, if brill means brilliant :)
joaquin- i cant tell either. starting anew is a bit of both, i guess :)
shucharita- brilliant :) very quaint.
workhard- good question, but by the standerds of the whales that visit me, it seems to have qualified :)
pradiptaa- your comment is a poem in itself :)
goirick- tor comment ta pore mon ta kemon jeno kore uthlo. khub shundor likhish...
harshita- am glad i achieved that :)
tanaya- i am so glad it made you think :)
hey lovely lines, dhamki huh? I am sure there is a degree of numbness too.
Wow. This pic instills a sense of calm and serenity in my. Does well right before my exams!! VFery tensed about them. Love your blog as well! Thanks for stopping by. Keep visiting though!
ohh i seemed to have missed too much of this blog :9 sorry about that. you know. my exams! could resist commenting on this,
as coffee angel said, serene and studied
not just beautiful it is but it is too deep in its meaning also.
loved it very much.
but i think more than a haiku, it is a senryu to be precise.
keep writting. :)
Yeah! Off with the greasy Fair and Lovely!
BTW that is some famous impressionist paining isn't it?
My DK Illustrated Oxford dictionary has this picture for the entry explaining impressionism.
Or was it different? Heck I am confused and the dictionariy is many cities away :P
Simply spellbinding!
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