A secret flame of steely ice
Cuts through layers
Of secret lies.
A secret lust,
Some secret fears
Choke to death
On secret tears.
Beneath the layers of secret lies
No one knows
When a secret dies.
Some secret fears,
A secret lust
Slowly, slowly
Turn to dust.
Secret flames on icy breath.
Secrets die
A lonely death.
This is a Painting by K.P.Reji. It is called 'Wait, Wait For The Next Move'. I'm sorry for the horrible picture quality, it was taken with my phone.
If this painting makes you write something- a poem, a haiku, some lines, whatever, please do share...
Amritorupa Kanjilal also writes at Rivers I Have Known: Books, Reviews, and More. Please visit her there!
Cuts through layers
Of secret lies.
A secret lust,
Some secret fears
Choke to death
On secret tears.
Beneath the layers of secret lies
No one knows
When a secret dies.
Some secret fears,
A secret lust
Slowly, slowly
Turn to dust.
Secret flames on icy breath.
Secrets die
A lonely death.
This is a Painting by K.P.Reji. It is called 'Wait, Wait For The Next Move'. I'm sorry for the horrible picture quality, it was taken with my phone.
If this painting makes you write something- a poem, a haiku, some lines, whatever, please do share...
Amritorupa Kanjilal also writes at Rivers I Have Known: Books, Reviews, and More. Please visit her there!
65 paper boats came floating back to me:
nice one :)...i like it :)
bhalo lageche pore
tui lekh.aro lekh.. mon bhalo nei re...lekhte parina...kichu parina.....tui lekh..aro lekh..pran bhore lekh..mon ta ke bhalo korte hobe to...lekh
good one.. n the painting too...
So many secrets! Good going...very innovative. The pic looks good too!
Just read 'The Secret' did you?? lol
A beautiful painting indeed a nicely written poem to go with it. Good show.
Nice flow of thoughts, Amritoupa. Liked the way you tinkered with stanzas two and four...
So true. Secrets (that are kept!) do face a rather lonely end...
Peace.
Secrets always provide material for good writing! And we still don't know what the secret is...like the brick wall layout on your blog. You may not be as lost as you think, good writing here. LL
I loved this poem. I'm sorta keeping a big secret myself and the last two lines really spoke to me.
wow, beautiful poem!! here is wut i have to say:
beneath the pleasure
lies a tear drop unknown to you
which speaks my rancor!
u visited an art gallery?? which one??
Beautiful Lines, L'girl...really beautiful!!!
The pic is perfect for it:)
Beautiful :o) wil inflict guilt in the hearts of those carrying secrets...ur mission accomplished...unless of course u were seeking "relief" from carrying ur own??
now thats a welcome back post amrita, and nice work, the painting too innovative i would say, and here it is, as it come to my mind for the picture :
encaged in the woods yet
my dreams go wild..
the goal so near yet
soo tiring my legs to chase
caged me may be now and ever,yet
my dreams travel, to the goal.
( there is the deer in the pic, the ultimate goal):D and yeah, nice shot lady !
Your poem is drop dead gorgeous.
The gate to my soul
Is guarded by a tiger
Behind lies freedom
lovely poetry !
Lovely poem, and the picture is the perfect companion...
The secret envy-snake
crouched in her heart
unheard, unseen
But when sleep ruptured
You could see her
eyes flash green
Truly said, secrets do die a lonely death!
I loved it as usual :) I am in love with your blog!
Secret is just like live fish swiming beneath the ice in frozen lakes. The truth today if get covered under secrets remains truth only only time shall tell you about it.
Secret flames on icy breath.
Secrets die
A lonely death.
i simply loved it..
these lines r so beautiful
Painting too...
cheers :)
Pallav
amit- thanks dude... means a lot...
Goirick- words are madicine. words are catharsis. never quit writing buddy.
amal- thak you :)
Nikki- thank you. nice picture btw...
Kartz- and i like the way you tinkered with my name...
aniket- no, but i just watched se7en. that helped....
lorenzo- the 'lost' is a camouflage. damn, you guessed :)
ki- i hope your secret isnt covered in layers of secret lies :)
anil-
1. grooovy new pic dude...
2. not an art galery, i got it from a magazine.
3. i LOVED your lines. they seem to have beautifully grasped the hidden message in the painting, the hidden terror and violence...
deepa- that is a big complement, since i was trying to find lines to fit the paiting and not the other way around...
sweta- both, actually :)
shravan- good job dude! i loved your poem, the sense of an opportunity missed, a small gap... something hidden...
delicious...
Cat- will i ever ever ever learn to do 5-7-5 like you... that was SO powerful... thank you...
sucharita... thank you so much for those VERY scary lines... you seem to have gone into the deepest human psyche...
Satan's darling- that feeling is mutual :)
pradip- beautiful beautiful lines :)
pallav- thanks buddy...
...Nihsondehe... amar pora ekta birol kobita...badhyo hoe amar koekti line upohar dilam...
"..kintu majhe modhye pathor hoe jaoar bidyeta/ ami khub jani.../je pathore prithibir songsporshe jole uthe agun/tarpor store store neme asar somoy/milie jay batase.../kono chinho baki thakena aguner!/ pathorer gorbhe je dur groher rohosyo /fupiye kaade.../miliye jabar aage ta keu shunte payna...!/shiter rat, kuashar jol../keu na...!"
Thank you for sharing with us such an original work...you know, I tried to concentrate on the best line of ur poem... I failed.. coz I could not choose the best one... every line was so "true"... its something like... u din't tried to write it down... truth floated out of ur pen... suddenly... in a moment... I am sure it was like that... one can never try to write such poems... they come out... spontaneously... !!! I was thirsty for such a rain... It rained... in Kolkata yesterday... and after that I see here... thank you.
atanu- dhonyobaad, khub khub shundor laglo.
"A secret lust,
Some secret fears
Choke to death
On secret tears"
..........khub bhalo legeche....pratekh ta shobdo eto satti...keep walking!!!
... and aagar post ta bishesh bhalo lageni tai comment korini....kharap pash na....:)
anorak- kharap paai ni to... ashole ekhane onek dhoroner lekha thake. something for everybody. :)
Nice poem there... some secrets do go to the grave :)
that painting looks awesome... thanks for sharing...
have a nice day... cheers...
arv- thanks man, you too...
aiyaiyo girl!!!! how u to be the writings like to this???? u touch my heart!!!
:P to all who complain of u doin poems....no number is too many for me!
this was simply lovely LGL!!!
crafty- do you know, i wait so eagerly for your comment after every post :)
aww girl! just for those valuable words, me too wants to share something!
u r the only one whose blog i added INSTANTLY on my blogroll...i am like Dory from Finding Nemo, and i did not want to miss reading ur blog on acct of my poor memory!!! :D
hugs!!!! u'll find me here as long as u write LGL!!
LGL, lovely poem. Even better read aloud. Fav line: "Secret flames on icy breath."
Nice work!
The moment I read the title, knew it wud be real good. U exceeded the expectation though once I read thru :).
I love the idea of having "layers of secret lies" that hide so many things in this poem. The idea of choking to death on secret tears feel real to me. I like the whole thing - great examples well chosen.
I have seen Se7en.
Aj theke Kobi pokhyer kobita guchho publishing shuru holo... Besh kichu selected kobita publish korar kotha ache...
Tomar post gulo din din aro better hochhe. Well, ami Perfume dekhlam, movie ta, besh lyrical laglo. Cruel er theke besh poetic laglo. Hope to read more good words from you.
Jennifer- finallY!! thanks for coming...
i agree, more fun reading it aloud and getting a feel of all those S's
Brown Phantom- thank you for saying i exceeded your expectations... it sounds scary that you had any in the first place... :)
welcome back
Nishant- thanks dude
karen- i am learning to fight the tendency to get up and do a jig every time you comment to say you like :)
pradiptaa- thank you for saying i am improving. the feedback and all ths readership is helping a lot. each post is like a challenge.
Changed a bit my blog : A new Rabindra Sangeet Experimental work is also being published. I'll wait for your comments on the changes...
u know if evanscence were to sing this as a song..it d be awesome..sachii...try picturing it...
good work girl ;-)
luv
amith
Believe it or not, I have been working on a photograph not unlike this one, though no tiger. Don't worry, I will not post it. Great minds, eh?
Mean to say: superb post.
that leaves me wondering....did the painting or the poem rock more! :)
profound!
The painting held my attention for a very long time... that happens rarely these days...
your choice of art and words impresses me
Oops. Missed the *r*, there. Sholly! It wasn't deliberate, I assure you. :)
Peace.
ya i truly believe the situation of tigers in india is very bad we have lost all the tigers in the two biggest reserves of country
"A secret lust,
Some secret fears
Choke to death
On secret tears"
"Some secret fears,
A secret lust
Slowly, slowly
Turn to dust"
Correct me if I’m wrong
I find the two Para beautiful
Yet talking the same thing.
The only difference may in tears you still have the pain
And in dust ,sheer indifference
"...Beneath the layers of secret lies
No one knows
When a secret dies...
...Secrets die
A lonely death..."
...bar bar porchhi...
...sotyi lekhoni... kichhu kichhu kobita..amader chhobir moto samne bhese uthe... segulo sudhu kolomer opekkhay thake...
...So many secrets...we have murdered them brutally...ora duhsahosi chhilo...tai oder spordha kkhoma kore deoa jayni... they always "dies a lonely death"
"Some secret fears,
A secret lust
Slowly, slowly
Turn to dust." ........ simply wowww.
amio try korbo to write something based on the painting.
well this is your best poem...(though little girl sounded nice with a nice u kno shock value at the end..but honestly i dint quite get it)...kind of reminded me of a TOOL song " schism"....anywy why dont u write more poems...?
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