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Sunday, May 3, 2009

Secrets Die A Lonely Death

A secret flame of steely ice
Cuts through layers
Of secret lies.

A secret lust,
Some secret fears
Choke to death
On secret tears.

Beneath the layers of secret lies
No one knows
When a secret dies.

Some secret fears,
A secret lust
Slowly, slowly
Turn to dust.

Secret flames on icy breath.
Secrets die
A lonely death.


This is a Painting by K.P.Reji. It is called 'Wait, Wait For The Next Move'. I'm sorry for the horrible picture quality, it was taken with my phone.
If this painting makes you write something- a poem, a haiku, some lines, whatever, please do
share...


Amritorupa Kanjilal also writes at Rivers I Have Known: Books, Reviews, and More. Please visit her there! 

66 paper boats came floating back to me:

Hopeless Romantic said...

nice one :)...i like it :)

still thinking !!! said...

bhalo lageche pore
tui lekh.aro lekh.. mon bhalo nei re...lekhte parina...kichu parina.....tui lekh..aro lekh..pran bhore lekh..mon ta ke bhalo korte hobe to...lekh

Amal Bose said...

good one.. n the painting too...

Nikki said...

So many secrets! Good going...very innovative. The pic looks good too!

Aniket said...

Just read 'The Secret' did you?? lol

A beautiful painting indeed a nicely written poem to go with it. Good show.

Kartz said...

Nice flow of thoughts, Amritoupa. Liked the way you tinkered with stanzas two and four...

So true. Secrets (that are kept!) do face a rather lonely end...

Peace.

LORENZO said...

Secrets always provide material for good writing! And we still don't know what the secret is...like the brick wall layout on your blog. You may not be as lost as you think, good writing here. LL

ki said...

I loved this poem. I'm sorta keeping a big secret myself and the last two lines really spoke to me.

sawan said...

wow, beautiful poem!! here is wut i have to say:

beneath the pleasure
lies a tear drop unknown to you
which speaks my rancor!

u visited an art gallery?? which one??

deepazartz said...

Beautiful Lines, L'girl...really beautiful!!!
The pic is perfect for it:)

coffeeismypoison said...

Beautiful :o) wil inflict guilt in the hearts of those carrying secrets...ur mission accomplished...unless of course u were seeking "relief" from carrying ur own??

Shravan | ശ്രവണ്‍ said...

now thats a welcome back post amrita, and nice work, the painting too innovative i would say, and here it is, as it come to my mind for the picture :

encaged in the woods yet
my dreams go wild..
the goal so near yet
soo tiring my legs to chase
caged me may be now and ever,yet
my dreams travel, to the goal.

( there is the deer in the pic, the ultimate goal):D and yeah, nice shot lady !

Catvibe said...

Your poem is drop dead gorgeous.


The gate to my soul
Is guarded by a tiger
Behind lies freedom

Arun said...

lovely poetry !

Sucharita Sarkar said...

Lovely poem, and the picture is the perfect companion...

The secret envy-snake
crouched in her heart
unheard, unseen

But when sleep ruptured
You could see her
eyes flash green

Satans Darling™ said...

Truly said, secrets do die a lonely death!

I loved it as usual :) I am in love with your blog!

Pradip Biswas said...

Secret is just like live fish swiming beneath the ice in frozen lakes. The truth today if get covered under secrets remains truth only only time shall tell you about it.

Pallav said...

Secret flames on icy breath.
Secrets die
A lonely death.
i simply loved it..
these lines r so beautiful
Painting too...

cheers :)
Pallav

Little Girl Lost said...

amit- thanks dude... means a lot...

Little Girl Lost said...

Goirick- words are madicine. words are catharsis. never quit writing buddy.

Little Girl Lost said...

amal- thak you :)

Little Girl Lost said...

Nikki- thank you. nice picture btw...

Little Girl Lost said...

Kartz- and i like the way you tinkered with my name...

Little Girl Lost said...

aniket- no, but i just watched se7en. that helped....

Little Girl Lost said...

lorenzo- the 'lost' is a camouflage. damn, you guessed :)

Little Girl Lost said...

ki- i hope your secret isnt covered in layers of secret lies :)

Little Girl Lost said...

anil-
1. grooovy new pic dude...
2. not an art galery, i got it from a magazine.
3. i LOVED your lines. they seem to have beautifully grasped the hidden message in the painting, the hidden terror and violence...

Little Girl Lost said...

deepa- that is a big complement, since i was trying to find lines to fit the paiting and not the other way around...

Little Girl Lost said...

sweta- both, actually :)

Little Girl Lost said...

shravan- good job dude! i loved your poem, the sense of an opportunity missed, a small gap... something hidden...
delicious...

Little Girl Lost said...

Cat- will i ever ever ever learn to do 5-7-5 like you... that was SO powerful... thank you...

Little Girl Lost said...

sucharita... thank you so much for those VERY scary lines... you seem to have gone into the deepest human psyche...

Little Girl Lost said...

Satan's darling- that feeling is mutual :)

Little Girl Lost said...

pradip- beautiful beautiful lines :)

Little Girl Lost said...

pallav- thanks buddy...

atanu nath said...

...Nihsondehe... amar pora ekta birol kobita...badhyo hoe amar koekti line upohar dilam...

"..kintu majhe modhye pathor hoe jaoar bidyeta/ ami khub jani.../je pathore prithibir songsporshe jole uthe agun/tarpor store store neme asar somoy/milie jay batase.../kono chinho baki thakena aguner!/ pathorer gorbhe je dur groher rohosyo /fupiye kaade.../miliye jabar aage ta keu shunte payna...!/shiter rat, kuashar jol../keu na...!"

Thank you for sharing with us such an original work...you know, I tried to concentrate on the best line of ur poem... I failed.. coz I could not choose the best one... every line was so "true"... its something like... u din't tried to write it down... truth floated out of ur pen... suddenly... in a moment... I am sure it was like that... one can never try to write such poems... they come out... spontaneously... !!! I was thirsty for such a rain... It rained... in Kolkata yesterday... and after that I see here... thank you.

Little Girl Lost said...

atanu- dhonyobaad, khub khub shundor laglo.

Anorak said...

"A secret lust,
Some secret fears
Choke to death
On secret tears"
..........khub bhalo legeche....pratekh ta shobdo eto satti...keep walking!!!

... and aagar post ta bishesh bhalo lageni tai comment korini....kharap pash na....:)

Little Girl Lost said...

anorak- kharap paai ni to... ashole ekhane onek dhoroner lekha thake. something for everybody. :)

Arv said...

Nice poem there... some secrets do go to the grave :)

that painting looks awesome... thanks for sharing...

have a nice day... cheers...

Little Girl Lost said...

arv- thanks man, you too...

craftyshines said...

aiyaiyo girl!!!! how u to be the writings like to this???? u touch my heart!!!

:P to all who complain of u doin poems....no number is too many for me!

this was simply lovely LGL!!!

Little Girl Lost said...

crafty- do you know, i wait so eagerly for your comment after every post :)

craftyshines said...

aww girl! just for those valuable words, me too wants to share something!
u r the only one whose blog i added INSTANTLY on my blogroll...i am like Dory from Finding Nemo, and i did not want to miss reading ur blog on acct of my poor memory!!! :D

hugs!!!! u'll find me here as long as u write LGL!!

Jennifer said...

LGL, lovely poem. Even better read aloud. Fav line: "Secret flames on icy breath."

Nice work!

BrownPhantom said...

The moment I read the title, knew it wud be real good. U exceeded the expectation though once I read thru :).

NISHANT NISCHAL said...

Khoob bhalo... :-)

Karen said...

I love the idea of having "layers of secret lies" that hide so many things in this poem. The idea of choking to death on secret tears feel real to me. I like the whole thing - great examples well chosen.

Pradiptaa said...

I have seen Se7en.

Aj theke Kobi pokhyer kobita guchho publishing shuru holo... Besh kichu selected kobita publish korar kotha ache...

Tomar post gulo din din aro better hochhe. Well, ami Perfume dekhlam, movie ta, besh lyrical laglo. Cruel er theke besh poetic laglo. Hope to read more good words from you.

Little Girl Lost said...

Jennifer- finallY!! thanks for coming...
i agree, more fun reading it aloud and getting a feel of all those S's

Little Girl Lost said...

Brown Phantom- thank you for saying i exceeded your expectations... it sounds scary that you had any in the first place... :)
welcome back

Little Girl Lost said...

Nishant- thanks dude

Little Girl Lost said...

karen- i am learning to fight the tendency to get up and do a jig every time you comment to say you like :)

Little Girl Lost said...

pradiptaa- thank you for saying i am improving. the feedback and all ths readership is helping a lot. each post is like a challenge.

Pradiptaa said...

Changed a bit my blog : A new Rabindra Sangeet Experimental work is also being published. I'll wait for your comments on the changes...

Dream'R said...

u know if evanscence were to sing this as a song..it d be awesome..sachii...try picturing it...

good work girl ;-)

luv
amith

Dave King said...

Believe it or not, I have been working on a photograph not unlike this one, though no tiger. Don't worry, I will not post it. Great minds, eh?

Dave King said...

Mean to say: superb post.

lafemmereva said...

that leaves me wondering....did the painting or the poem rock more! :)

Priyanka Khot said...

profound!

The painting held my attention for a very long time... that happens rarely these days...

your choice of art and words impresses me

Kartz said...

Oops. Missed the *r*, there. Sholly! It wasn't deliberate, I assure you. :)

Peace.

sudarshan bengani said...

ya i truly believe the situation of tigers in india is very bad we have lost all the tigers in the two biggest reserves of country

still thinking !!! said...

"A secret lust,
Some secret fears
Choke to death
On secret tears"

"Some secret fears,
A secret lust
Slowly, slowly
Turn to dust"

Correct me if I’m wrong
I find the two Para beautiful
Yet talking the same thing.
The only difference may in tears you still have the pain
And in dust ,sheer indifference

atanu nath said...

"...Beneath the layers of secret lies
No one knows
When a secret dies...

...Secrets die
A lonely death..."

...bar bar porchhi...
...sotyi lekhoni... kichhu kichhu kobita..amader chhobir moto samne bhese uthe... segulo sudhu kolomer opekkhay thake...
...So many secrets...we have murdered them brutally...ora duhsahosi chhilo...tai oder spordha kkhoma kore deoa jayni... they always "dies a lonely death"

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

"Some secret fears,
A secret lust
Slowly, slowly
Turn to dust." ........ simply wowww.

amio try korbo to write something based on the painting.

SANDIPAN said...

well this is your best poem...(though little girl sounded nice with a nice u kno shock value at the end..but honestly i dint quite get it)...kind of reminded me of a TOOL song " schism"....anywy why dont u write more poems...?