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Friday, March 12, 2010

For Almond Eyes




I try to write
Inside my head.
I play with words all day.
I paint with them.
I sing to them.
But I cannot make them stay.


I tried to write
Of castles built
With matches, cards and strings.
Of hours spent
In slow regret,
And blowing perfect rings.


I’ve tried to write
Of why I sought
A downward curving smile.
And how we interred
A girl who dared
To love with tasteless guile.

Doing the math
Of collision paths,
And vows that sound sublime.
And motherhood
Tied hand and foot,
Sneering, biding time.

Of all of me,
Together to be
A small domestic army.
Of words that scald
My faulty world,
And blows that merely scar me.


Of Almond Eyes,
And all the lies
I’ve told to get this far.
Falling in love
With a man I thought
I’d been loving from the start.

I’m trying to make
These words behave
The way I’m perambulating.
Words are all
I’ve ever screwed
(But that’s me, deviating)


Almond Eyes
I want to write.
That’s all I’m trying to say.
I want to write
For you, my love,
But you take my words away.





Amritorupa Kanjilal alo writes at Rivers I Have Known: Books, Reviews, and More. Please visit her there!

24 paper boats came floating back to me:

Akash said...

ebhabeo phire asha jae :)) ...wonderful poem....

Anonymous said...

What a compliment in the final stanza.

Kriti said...

Somehow, the last stanza (referring to Jason's comment) doesn't seem like a comment to me... more of an aptly disguised subtle accusation really. But then, poetry is open to any number of interpretations.

The paradox of writing about not being able to write and producing sheer brilliance... :)

Love these lines

Doing the math
Of collision paths,
And vows that sound sublime.
And motherhood
Tied hand and foot,
Sneering, biding time.


Classic LGL! Glad you kept your promise. :)

coffeeismypoison said...

its sometimes a good thing...if someone takes ur words away...clearly thats given u something,s omething else to write about?
lovely poem :)

Ire said...

And I have no words to describe the post! Lovely!

How you been?

Shruti said...

So beautiful!

Sucharita Sarkar said...

I tried to write,
How much I liked
This lovely poem by you
But as always
My senses reel
And you take my breath away!!!

Sucharita Sarkar said...

I tried to write,
How much I liked
This lovely poem by you
But as always
My senses reel
And you take my breath away!!!

Winnie the poohi said...

Reminds me of the song.. piya bina from Abhiman.. specifically...

'Piya jab se roothe.. ke hoton se merey.. sangeet rootha..'

The Sunflower Collective said...

i like

Karen said...

It's so nice to know you're still writing, and writing about writing is best of all! This has very interesting images -- castles built/With matches, card, and strings; blowing perfect rings; a downward curving smile; the math of collision paths; motherhood tied hand and foot, sneering; blows that scar; and, of course, Almond Eyes. Beautiful and interesting journey toward the loss of words.

Aniket Thakkar said...

I've been slacking due to lack of competition. I've never managed to rhyme matching the syllables for rhythm. You've done for the larger part in the poem.

I see I have to up my game now. :P

Tongue-fu Lady said...

wow L-G-L! ur poems are always so intense..i guess it personifies the poet completely...please write more often :))

Bhavesh Chhatbar said...

You have an amazing art of writing! Outstanding!!

Bhavesh

 

joaquin carvel said...

i don't know where you've been, lgl, but you just took me on a trip to sublimity.
this is truly wonderful. musical and moving and wry and honest - i will be reading this many times more.

Anil Sawan said...

fantabulous!!! felt as if u wer here reading out the words u wrote! its been long tht i read a blog :( m happy tht i came back and read this one :)

BloggerMouth said...

I can't believe I haven't been here bef... I mean... joined the dance yet. Such a beautiful poem. I liked the rhyme scheme and I liked how you've used your words to mean more than one thing. Things like that make this a very powerful, emotional read. I'll be back. Thanks for writing! :)

Deepa Gopal said...

As lovely as always! Nice to read ur work...like before:)

ps:Congrats!!! And hope u both are having a good time. Can u mail me ur mail id??? Atleast next time when u go missing, I can check on u:))) Really, misd u my friend!

buno mainak said...

good,intense,tight but cliche.overused words and images crowd together....we want sum freshness from ur pen,dear

Amit Kumar Das said...

Oh Almond eyes
ride these words
and fly high
you are not binded to the sky ... keep walking!!!

Nile said...

Extremly nice poem ... Could not stop myself from commenting inspite of not knowing you... Nice post ....

Sham Saha said...

Very Nice and Sweet

Zeba said...

Hey You!! So. It's been a long long time. I am not even sure if you remember me anymore. I shut my blog down almost a year back. And this sounds weird but I tried contacting you. Don't have your mail ID though.. I needed to talk to you about Calcutta! zeba.24.01.07@gmail.com

idle thoughts said...

lovely